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Haiku for life
(10-04-2024, 04:14 AM)FlyingClayDisk Wrote: Sorry guys.  I wrote a haiku, but then realized after the fact that I had (6) syllables in the 1st line, not (5), thus my "Oops" comment.

I'm not much for haiku, so I just deleted it.

The problem with the last one that I wrote is that I thought someone might get the wrong idea also "after the fact ". Sometimes these extremely brief literary pieces can go a couple different ways with the interpretation. Explicitly, my last one was a reference to Putin from within the "doomsday clock" context.

I count the syllables with my fingers so there's not much chance of messing up there unless I'm thinking 5 when it should be 7 or vice versa, and I could write haikus, play literary games, and write short pieces many times a day every day whereas FCD appears more as the articulate volume writer like your typical author just typing away – not much for brevity (IMO).
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Never oops but only
Lovely happy accidents
So says chia-hair Bob
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(10-03-2024, 08:55 PM)IdeomotorPrisoner Wrote: My tears touch the ice
Which is melted by the fire
Enter Ragnarök

Enter Ragnarök
O Fortuna the hammer
Cry metal thunder
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(10-04-2024, 04:14 AM)FlyingClayDisk Wrote: Sorry guys.  I wrote a haiku, but then realized after the fact that I had (6) syllables in the 1st line, not (5), thus my "Oops" comment.

I'm not much for haiku, so I just deleted it.

I often write something within the general cadence of a haiku, and then I go back and tweak it into compliance with the count.  

I know you know what I'm talking about.   Cheers  Thumbup

(10-04-2024, 10:15 AM)UltraBudgie Wrote: Never oops but only
Lovely happy accidents
So says chia-hair Bob

I absolutely LOVE this haiku.   Just leaves a person with a quirky happy feel.   PERfect.   I am ... betickled.  (just tried to embed the copywrite symbol)
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(10-05-2024, 04:38 PM)argentus Wrote: I often write something within the general cadence of a haiku, and then I go back and tweak it into compliance with the count.  

I know you know what I'm talking about.   Cheers  Thumbup

Oops, tried a Haiku
Had too many syllables
Then had to bag it.
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(10-05-2024, 04:47 PM)FlyingClayDisk Wrote: Oops, tried a Haiku
Had too many syllables
Then had to bag it.

Then had to bag it
Or, Did I DARE to frag it?
Verily, I did!! Biggrin
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Fly little shield-bug
I opened up the window
But you won't go out


i mean its been like three days now and he just wants to hang around inside. its not even bad weather out. he just keeps popping up every once in a while and i'm like "oh. you're over here now. hello."

"bzzzddt".

how can i be lonely with friends like these?
I followed the Science, and all I found was the Money.
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It's watching me now
That tiny interloper
Chasing the white screen.
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Dove, robin, dove, sparrow
All in a row, at peace
Morning has broken
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Fall has shown its face
No cared to vote and now
Orange is the new black
I followed the Science, and all I found was the Money.
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