JonBenet

[midicon]

I think this is actually pretty good; the Tinker the Cat one as well. On first glance earlier it didn't even click that this was about that little girl from the mid '90s. I suppose we were troubleshooting moreso than I was reading at the time.

You do seem to structure your writing very nicely from what I've seen so far. All of the stanzas are uniform right down to the line, and the width is mostly uniform as well(the aesthetically pleasing parts). Also, and last but not least, the content itself is nicely formulated.

Really the only thing I would critique here is the spacing after the title which is mostly just a minor aesthetic. From what I've learned it's usually double spaced and single spaced between stanzas.

You got an iPhone, lucky you. All I got is some cheap Android that I use in the car as a streaming dashcam, but I suppose it does the job. I'm fairly proficient with desktop PC's, but phones, not so much(at all, really).

I like critique CC, it gives me feedback that I can take on board! I never think about stanzas and stuff. I kind of just go for meter and rhyme. Ill have to look at that.

That sad affair really had a lot of elements that could lend themselves to such a rhyme. Where else would one find merry maids and Santa?

Thank you for taking the time to comment here and earlier too! I can learn a lot from someone like you!

Regards midicon