Hi Maxmars,
This piece is profound as it delves into three very powerful and esoteric forces unified by a familial bonding; and it all makes sense to me. Even the title is perfectly appropriate.
I really like the structure; with the equivalences in the first verse, the definitions of those comparisons in the second verse and the elaborations in the last three. The pyramid-like structure I think adds a certain mystery to the whole.
Additionally, I’ve always enjoyed personifying objects, animals and traits, so, I appreciate that aspect of your poem/prose. Finally, the references to nature make it feel more organic and comforting; an especially beneficial read when our souls are troubled.
All in all, a solid 10/10!!
This piece is profound as it delves into three very powerful and esoteric forces unified by a familial bonding; and it all makes sense to me. Even the title is perfectly appropriate.
I really like the structure; with the equivalences in the first verse, the definitions of those comparisons in the second verse and the elaborations in the last three. The pyramid-like structure I think adds a certain mystery to the whole.
Additionally, I’ve always enjoyed personifying objects, animals and traits, so, I appreciate that aspect of your poem/prose. Finally, the references to nature make it feel more organic and comforting; an especially beneficial read when our souls are troubled.
All in all, a solid 10/10!!
