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Learning to Bloom - UltraBudgie - 09-22-2024
Her Golden Ticket
When she learned
That the factory was hers
And she got into the great
Glass elevator
There were only buttons
Buttons and glass
As clear as molten sugar
And the only one to press
Was
"Up and out"
RE: Learning to Bloom - Quantum12 - 09-22-2024
(09-22-2024, 12:18 AM)UltraBudgie Wrote: Her Golden Ticket
When she learned
That the factory was hers
And she got into the great
Glass elevator
There were only buttons
Buttons and glass
As clear as molten sugar
And the only one to press
Was
"Up and out"
Nice! I am sure she was happy to leave this world and move on!
RE: Learning to Bloom - Encia22 - 09-22-2024
(09-22-2024, 12:18 AM)UltraBudgie Wrote: Her Golden Ticket
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I love "As clear as molten sugar"!
I know I'm way off base, but your poem brought to mind the life of a queen bee. I don't know why and I can't consolidate the ending with that notion, but that's the vision in my mind, and I can't shake it.
I'm sure Quantum12 is on the right track.
RE: Learning to Bloom - Quantum12 - 09-22-2024
(09-22-2024, 11:26 AM)Encia22 Wrote: I love "As clear as molten sugar"!
I know I'm way off base, but your poem brought to mind the life of a queen bee. I don't know why and I can't consolidate the ending with that notion, but that's the vision in my mind, and I can't shake it.
I'm sure Quantum12 is on the right track.
I like what you see! My mind is sometimes blurry, lol!
RE: Learning to Bloom - UltraBudgie - 09-24-2024
(09-22-2024, 11:26 AM)Encia22 Wrote: I'm sure Quantum12 is on the right track.
(09-22-2024, 12:18 PM)Quantum12 Wrote: I like what you see! My mind is sometimes blurry, lol!
actually I think youre both right on, thank you
queen b i like that wouldnt it bee sweet if hives were transparent?
RE: Learning to Bloom - Encia22 - 09-24-2024
(09-24-2024, 02:38 AM)UltraBudgie Wrote:
actually I think youre both right on, thank you
queen b i like that wouldnt it bee sweet if hives were transparent?
Lol, thanks, I'm glad you like the bee idea.
I think I arrived at that concept because of the words 'factory', 'molten sugar' and 'up and out'. I remember from studying bees, that the queen bee leaves the hive when she's ready to mate and is chased by the male drones.
Yes, a transparent hive would be fantastic! But, their privacy would be compromised.
